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                           (for my border poems)

               We can feel
   so much rage
        in this
               voice
       but show
               don't tell

               This line
   where your four
               year old speaker leaves
               his abuelita
               behind
   reminds me of
                --
               &--
  check them out

               Pollero
   is a good word

              (is Spanish?)
              (italics?)

  We like the four-by-four
              its trunk
  we like the desert & your use of
              snuck

              Is it true
   are people really smuggled through
              like this

              We just don't buy
   that a toddler could really fit
              inside

   It's cluttered
              unclear
              pls show

   Suggestions for revision
              MORE

   abuelita more

              flor
              y fauna
              more

         VOICE

             less rage

   If possible pls show why
              they run
              towards what
   why would anyone be
              trust

              We can tell

   so much is left
              behind
              unsaid

   We can feel
              your searching
   your homesick
              for your
              end
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Author:Hernandez, Ricardo
Publication:Witness
Article Type:Poem
Date:Mar 22, 2019
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